As the Ashes Blow

by vox nihili

Published November 18, 2012

In works

Note: this is meant to be sung, so it contains some ontemontepia, such as continued vowel sounds to denote rhythym.

When I look at you, I see the fire in your eyes

When we touch, I feel the chill of fear inside your mind


During the freezing night
I saw explosions in my mind
And those we left behind
I said:
No, no Never, never will it be--
 right.


But you said,
Oh just hold on now, darlin'
It's only a short, short while to go
Whoah-oh-oh-oooo

Just hold on now darlin'

It's only a short while
We have to go
Just look at me
and hold me close
Even as the ashes bloooow


whoah-oh-oh-o-oooh

As the ashes, ashes blow

Again and again, I held you close, and you whispered in my ear:

Just hold me tight, lie close to me in the dark of night
The burning never ends, explosions in our minds
Just stay with me always and never let go
For it's only a short short while to go--

When I cry, hold me close- listen to my tears
No one can hear-us-now
There's nothing to fear
Nothing to lose
Nothing to find
For me and you

Somehow
Spring has come again
The flowers bloom the earth is green
Yet our ashes blow

In the burn of the night
Roses prickle in my sight
You tell you:
Please just let it go
Let the ashes blow.

Let it be, there's nothing for you and me
But to let it go, let our ashes blow.


I tell you, the burning will go
I see now, we still have a long long while left
To go
So let the ashes blow

Spring has come again.
Let your ashes blow.
We'll plant flowers in the fields
Don't let the children hear
The tales of woe,
For them, we'll let our ashes blow.

For them, yeah, we'll let our ashes blow.

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SkyeJane
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SkyeJane wrote a review Review · Nov 25, 2012

Ok Vox, Skye here. I really like this but for some reason I see it as a country song. Taylor Swiftish and all. Not that I like that stuff it just seemed that way. I'm sure you'll find something to fit it into though.
I don't know why you did this, but I think the first two lines should be written as one clump instead of being separated as much as they are. Otherwise I think they are great opening lines and I like the way it contrasts << fire- chill>>.
I also like how there is no set chorus it seems to allow the whole thing to flow freely between the separated parts.
Overall these lyrics give the sense that you are comforting somebody, despite the past.
"As the ashes blow", I love this line it shows that even hat there is more happening than the remnants of a past blaze.
I love the bits where you are asking for comfort and to be held. This shows that even though you will be there for the person you are human too and need to know you are loved. At least I hope it means this.
All in all it is a great song, Keep up the great work!! Skyexxx

Haha, yeah I actually wrote it in response to Safe and Sound. I heard that one, and I loved it, but I felt like it was missing a darker component which was omnipresent in the books. I felt like "ashes" alluded to the death and destruction at the end of the novels. I don't have a chorus, probably just because I know nothing about writing songs, and I find chorus lines to be fairly irritating when sung too many times. :P

unsocialbutterfly wrote a review Review · Nov 19, 2012

This is nice, I'd like to actually hear it sung :) The only things I saw were:
You tell you:
Please just let it go
Let the ashes blow.

I think you meant:
You tell me:
Please just let it go
Let the ashes blow.

and also:
I tell you, the burning will go
I see now, we still have a long long while left
To go
So let the ashes blow

(I know it's a picky thing):
I tell you, the burning will go
I see now, we still have a long, long while left
To go
So let the ashes blow

Thanks, Butterfly...I totally missed that "you tell you" XD Yeah, I'm trying to set it to music, but for some reason or another, it's much easier to write in words than it is to sing something and then figure out exactly what note each becomes. That and I stink at making cohesive melodies. Maybe I can hum or sing it and upload it here somewhere, even if I never actually write the music. :)

I'm a real freak when it comes to music. And to be honest, this song was just pure AMAZING. Might have been some spelling errors that people have pointed out but overall, I'd die if i couldn't listen to this song actually being sung by someone!! Please keep writing more!!



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